Sometimes, Cinderella

Sunday’s Whirligig: Wordle #75
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shape, milk, feet, play, bird, car,
dirt, love, brick, theme, diary, pumpkin

The Sunday Whirl: Whirl #26
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lightness, bee, cuttlefish, sparkle, shine, flake
mutable, veiled, precise, ignorant, tapestry, threat

Poets United: Poetry Pantry #318
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escher-unraveling

Sometimes, Cinderella

Time goes mute when bee of memory
shines its light on tapestry of past. Becomes

a veil of sepia stain, like the cuttlefish that
doesn’t threaten but stuns precise prey

with its venom. Ignorant victim is lost
in sparkle of one moment. Flake of time

that might never have happened.

Theme of lost love freezes feet, turning
them to dirt-colored bricks. Shapely tricks

that sour milk and impede any movement.
Splayed fingers play with page from diary.

Just another bird on the wire, she watches
as her carriage, once again, becomes

a hollowed out pumpkin.

Elizabeth Crawford – 9/4/2016

Notes: Did use all of the words. Had to look up cuttlefish and found some interesting information. It is considered the most intelligent of its kind, and does release a sepia like die that paralyses its victim. Some of the words were a bit of a reach, but I choose to call that poetic license. Image is from the internet.

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23 Responses to Sometimes, Cinderella

  1. Sumana Roy says:

    “as her carriage, once again, becomes

    a hollowed out pumpkin.”…coming back to reality…sigh…love the image of “Flake of time”…

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  2. oldegg says:

    So in the end she came back to earth where the pumpkin resides. Well done for the words total inclusion.

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  3. thotpurge says:

    Shapely tricks that sour milk and impede any movement… love that.

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  4. Time goes mute when bee of memory
    shines its light on tapestry of past. – love that! 🙂

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  5. Jae Rose says:

    I think you played some shapely tricks and created a cinderella story – a satin veil and solid brick of journey and poetry ..which made me think a little of the yellow brick road..

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  6. like the cuttlefish that
    doesn’t threaten but stuns precise prey
    with its venom. Ignorant victim is lost

    Survival techniques can really surprise when intelligence are shown by low level living things

    Hank

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  7. I do think we always need to be prepared for dreams to both come true, or wither from a carriage to a pumpkin… a hard lesson to learn

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  8. Mary says:

    Ah, yes, carriages are all temporary, it seems. The pumpkin is ‘the real deal.’

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  9. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Interesting!

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  10. Sherry Marr says:

    So often, we wait for the carriage, and wind up riding the pumpkin home. Makes for more interesting poetry though. I enjoyed this one, Elizabeth.

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  11. annell4 says:

    It was “flake” that tripped me up! But I enjoyed the words this time. And I loved what you wrote!

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  12. This is a densely packed and richly woven poem, full of meaning and mystery. A great read.

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  13. Myrna Rosa says:

    I enjoyed this Elizabeth. I’m always so impressed how can weave all the words and create something beautiful. I know that at one time or other, we all ride that hollow pumpkin.

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  14. ZQ says:

    Geesh! Tough words, tough challenge… but you bellied up to the bar 🙂 ❤

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  15. Pamela says:

    Elizabeth, you are of the heavenly using “cuttlefish”, I couldn’t even manage that one. And it was my contribution. Splendid poem, my friend.

    Pamela ox

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  16. Quite a challenge to incorporate all those words. Very cleverly implemented by using the Cinderella theme.

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  17. Julian says:

    I think this is well crafted, yep I did enjoy you poem.

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  18. Misky says:

    Oh “flake of time” — that’s good.

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  19. Love the breaks. They make me feel like I’m walking with the poet, at the speaker’s pace, while I read. Yum.

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  20. colonialist says:

    *always the optimist* But from the pumpkin she graduated to a real royal carriage, didn’t she? It was fitting! 🙂
    The cuttlefish squid are curious creatures. Great at camouflage, and their shells make excellent budgie beak controllers.

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  21. It always amazes me, how you pack so much ionto so little!

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