For the Sunday Whirl, Wordle #289
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miss, saw, sense, bits, smoke, words,
flat, leaks, eye, temple, track, swing
For Sunday’s Whirligig: Wordle #101
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forming, feeling, making, balance, ahead, crystal,
profit, power, poem, grammar, metaphors, syntax
For Poets United: Poetry Pantry #342
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These words, smoked in grammar
and syntax, should make sense, form
a poem using metaphor and balance
that captures both eye and feelings.
Instead, they miss that track, fall flat
of profitable power and swing toward
only the ordinary. Leak bits of crystal
clarity like shattered shards that cut
away meaning, sawed into gibberish by
would be poet, always searching ahead
for solid path that leads toward far away
sacred Temple of Truth and Beauty.
Elizabeth Crawford 6/5/2017
Notes: Haven’t been here for a while. Dealing with medical issues and computer problems. But, this week the words seemed to leap at me, saying it was time to return. I did, but had a lot of thoughts about why and how, and those thoughts obviously crept into this writing. But I did find satisfaction in using all of the words.
Image is an inverted pen and ink doodle.
Soul's Music 
smoked in grammar and syntax…like that,, your words certainly are!!!
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I agree, this is incredibly penned!❤️
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A very clever exercise – you combined the words in a beautiful way! I love it.
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There is so much grace in this poem, especially in the first stanza–it reads like a painting of poetry.
I hope your medical and computer issues are being resolved.
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A poem will make its own way, and say what it needs to say. I love this, Elisabeth. I hope your medical issues clear up fast.
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I find that poem spills out without a thought and form when i write them… sometimes starting just with words is the best way to form a thought
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I love the first paragraph (stanza?)..”smoked in grammar and syntax”…great line! This was a good read. Well written.
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Getting all these words to fit together as beautifully as you did is no small feat! I love the delicate feel of this, and the truth of the struggle to create something both beautiful and true.
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I’m looking for that Sacred Temple of Truth and Beauty as well! (Nice to see you back again, Elizabeth.)
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Hope you feel better! Good job.
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Lovely! I hope you feel better soon.
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Sounds very much like the way our lives are poems.
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Amazing facility with using the words!
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We all seek that solid path that leads to truth and beauty, but why is so difficult to find, and stick to it?
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wonderful
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The same seems Hank’s experience. A poem will lead one towards its own progress. It naturally flows along and hey, presto! A poem stares at oneself eventually!
Hank
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