Some Thoughts

For The Sunday Whirl poetry prompt: Wordle #182
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machine, flesh, tease, lotion, gimmick, hypnotizing,
lust, chickens, torture, uniform, liquor, brains, trains

And for Poets United poetry prompt: Poetry Pantry #222
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Some Thoughts

Although often compared, the mind is not
a machine. It is flesh, a network of blood
cells and muscle.

Human brains are filled with trains of thought
that tease or torture, hypnotizing the individual
into often wasted hours of contemplation.

Add liquor as a soothing lotion and one may
easily get lost wandering winding paths
between love and lust, or worse.

Only periodically uniform, these thought
gimmicks can turn us into chickens, squawking
our fear about never truly understanding anything.

Elizabeth Crawford 10/12/14

Notes: Really didn’t like these words when I first saw them. They didn’t speak to me, only left a blank space. After sleeping on them, I thought I had caught a bit of a glimmer of something intelligible so started. Got to the third stanza and stalled again. Only words left were gimmick, chickens, and uniform. Where do you go with that? Decided to take a break and took a look at Facebook. This was the first post I encountered. Started laughing, came back and finished.

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Have a wonderful day.

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23 Responses to Some Thoughts

  1. Like you, I got a huge kick out of the facebook post, which caps your poem off to perfection!

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  2. Elizabeth, you have a genius for shining light on the impenetrable! I like this one very much.

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  3. My brain’s mostly fat! No protein there! Love the meme at the end!

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  4. oldegg says:

    “Never truly understanding anything” that just about sums life up.

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  5. Sumana Roy says:

    well blended…

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  6. jae rose says:

    I am glad our minds are not machines otherwise those chickens would have slotted in easily (that one gave me trouble too)..thinking is what makes us human..us…hooray for that!

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  7. annell4 says:

    Chickens, was a challenge. I like what you ended up with!

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  8. Mary says:

    Very clever, Elizabeth. I like the way you attack these wordle poems, and I enjoyed hearing how you came up with the last stanza. Sometimes the human brain is nearly incomprehensible.

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  9. Misky says:

    Interesting, liquor as a soothing lotion. Nicely done, Elizabeth

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  10. magicalmysticalteacher says:

    The Internet is a lotion as soothing as liquor, I’ve found, and also an easy way to get lost!

    Whirling with Alberto

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  11. brian miller says:

    we have a angst to understand…and i think there are plenty of things we never need to understand….we do try to temper our thoughts with plenty of distractions….alcohol, whatever keeps us from having to think about some things…

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  12. Susan says:

    Clever. I have never seen a computing device having such angst in the face of a human!

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  13. Myrna says:

    You did a great job with the words. I love how your ending was inspired. I think we really already are insane. Good writing.

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  14. interesting…and that last photo you shared.. made me smile.

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  15. Cathy says:

    Yes, the brain is not a machine but it need a lot maintenance to keep it running smoothly. And sometimes the oil we use isn’t always the highest grade too. Glad that you were able to get a poem out these words. I know they weren’t easy.

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  16. minthe says:

    That second stanza is SO true.

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  17. Vinay Leo R. says:

    All are but facts, stated so poetically 🙂 Lovely write.

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  18. Oh you made ,e laugh a bit this morning! I often think maybe I am too!

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  19. Pamela says:

    Very well done, Elizabeth, with a very difficult set of words.

    Pamela ox

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  20. G L Meisner says:

    A very good poem.

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  21. seingraham says:

    Beautifully penned…as the commenter just before me said…a very good poem.

    http://whenthepenbleeds.blogspot.ca/2014/10/when-when.html

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  22. I think that truly understand anything can be that struggle that turn us into chickens (or worse)..

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