For The Sunday Whirl: Wordle #165


Wish I could whistle up
a fortune that wasn’t split
between bad habits
and six foot deep pit
of drilled debt.

Must constantly remind
myself that this porcelain
existence, on edge of crumbling
cliff, still retains moments
of exquisite beauty.

Elizabeth Crawford  6/15/14

Notes: Not satisfied with this one. Didn’t use all of the words. It doesn’t feel finished even though I know it is. Know there is always next week, though.


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14 Responses to Daydreaming

  1. oldegg says:

    Perhaps you bad habits could veer towards exquisite porcelain then you could be on a winner.


  2. If you figure out how to make it work, do let me know!


  3. Jae Rose says:

    Wishes have rough edges and feel unfinished..maybe your poem reflects that..although to me it reads dreaming is so important to help drag us through reality..we must always remember those beautiful bits..although cold hard cash would be good too..happy Sunday to you


  4. There’s beauty to be found even at the edge of a crumbling cliff. This is well done!


  5. I am never satisfied with my own writing, but yours never disappoints me.


  6. Mary says:

    Ah, I think we have to, no matter what, find a way to find and enjoy beauty in our lives.


  7. annell4 says:

    So beautifully put together.


  8. Sabra Bowers says:

    I want to whistle up a fortune with you! Your last stanza contains truth and poetry is nothing if not about truth. Well done.


  9. humbird says:

    Yeah, don’t forget to look around while crumbling. To your wish to come true! :)xx


  10. There is always beauty. Enjoy your Sunday!


  11. I teeter on the edge of that cliff, too, Elizabeth and thankfully yes, there are moments of such beauty!!!!!!! Going to my great grandson’s birthday today – he is eight! Yay! Something to celebrate!


  12. Pamela says:

    Enjoyed this, Elizabeth. I can see you tinkering with this to get it like you want it to be.

    Pamela ox


  13. Cathy says:

    Actually it sound finished to me. Sometimes it’s better to leave a poem rough


  14. seingraham says:

    I’m with Cathy…it feels complete to me also. I know what you mean too, though. Sometimes things just won’t come together and it’s annoying.


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