Burgeoning Poet II

Burgeoning Poet II
(a found poem from an unusual source)

Let me guess:

You tried to write a poem in regards
to human behavior and it wasn’t well received,
fell apart, blew up in your face…

You are a burgeoning poet, always
seeking that perfectly brilliant assembly
of lines, that elegant turn of phrase.
Human behavior is rarely, if ever, elegant.

The Universe is full of these
odd bumps and twists. Perhaps
you need to make your poem
less elegant, more accessible,
less perfectly precise, more descriptive,
less brilliant, more real.

It’s not going to be as perfectly pretty,
but it might be better heard,
a bit more relatable.

And remember, while you’re writing (learning)
about human problems…there’s going to be pain
and disappointment. You have to ask yourself:

“Is it worth it?”

If your response is in any way affirmative,
no more than the slight swiftest silent nod
at your inner ear, you will know that you are on
the path to becoming the you that you
are in the act of creating.

Elizabeth Crawford 2/1/14

Notes: In the course of writing to the Sunday Whirl prompt, I ended up writing about being caught between two worlds: those of numbers and words, a reality for me for most of my existence. I had to do some checking on facts and where I found them. I spend my leisure (escape hatch) time watching past episodes of old TV series I somehow missed when I was more physically capable of easy movement. One of them is Numb3rs in which Charlie Eppes is a mathematician helping the FBI solve varied crimes. In the Pilot Episode, a distraught Charlie seeks out his past professor, mentor, and now best friend because his solution didn’t pan out as expected.
His friend, Dr.Larry Fleinhardt, played by Peter MacNicol, responds to Charlie’s distress using much of the wording in the above poem. Of course, he was speaking to his Math student, but in my head, I heard poet. That’s why I refer to the poem as found. I simply replaced the elements of his mathematical discussion with those of the poet and added the last stanza to complete it. Larry’s character is eccentric, to say the least, but often unknowingly funny and very wise.
I have taken to adding the music that often accompanies my forays into poetry, either during the writing or immediately afterward. This one was easy. The song is another favorite and reminds me of the character Larry for several reasons. His is that of a spiritual seeker, trapped in a world that prizes logical and practical response. Something I relate to easily. The song always makes me smile and reminds me of Larry, even his voice is similar to that of the singer. It may be found here:


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7 Responses to Burgeoning Poet II

  1. brian miller says:

    that is really cool where you found the poem…and translating it through your own frame into poetry…there is wisdom in it…the making it less pretty and thus more accessible is solid and true….sometimes we can get so lofty in verse that our readers miss the point…and what then have we really accomplished?


  2. A fantastic write, and interesting process notes, kiddo. I especially love that answering in the affirmative means we are “becoming the person we are in the act of creating.” Perfect!


  3. Mary says:

    I really like the idea of becoming the YOU you are in the process of creating. That speaks to me. Perhaps we first create our identity in poetry….and then we live the live we created. I like to think that is possible MUCH of the time. We have to begin somewhere. The poetic journey and the life journey IS worth it indeed.


  4. I was really impressed with how you framed and formatted this… there are so many lines,words and phrases that can be related to….


  5. Gillena Cox says:

    “Art imitates life” if so then? that certainly has to be the equation; good write

    Have a nice Sunday

    much love…


  6. Myrna says:

    I used to watch that show. I really like how you wrote about poetry from dialogue about math. So clever. Thank you for the notes. I appreciate knowing the background of such a good poem.


  7. I loved this–I always love when we write about process–it is such an intimate thing


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