An Old Old Story

For The Sunday Whirl writing prompt: Wordle #126

Wordle #126

An Old Old Story

And I found out a long time ago
What a woman can do to your soul
Ah, but  she can’t take you any way
You don’t already know how to go
Peaceful Easy Feelings by The Eagles

She’d been looking for days,
seeking that single sumptuous specimen
with which to satisfy her curiosity.

Thin crisp skin spread over and around
vibrant, tender meat. Sticky sweet juices
released with one vivacious bite.

With sassy manipulative grin, she offered
the apple to her male companion. He finished
it in a few short seconds.

Elizabeth Crawford  9/15/13

Notes: For whatever reason, some of the words reminded me of the Garden of Eden story. The song lyrics started running through my head the moment I began writing. I did not use all of the words, just the ones I needed.

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19 Responses to An Old Old Story

  1. Just enough too. It worked well.


  2. Stan Ski says:

    Yeah… we always bite off more than we can chew…


  3. oldegg says:

    I still think Eve was given a raw deal…well she was in the raw so to speak.


  4. annell says:

    Me too. Seemed different this time?


  5. Sabra Bowers says:

    This is a juicy poem. I always feel compelled to use all the words. Sometimes it makes a better poem not to use them all. I hope to feel less compelled in the future, after your great example this morning.


  6. Jae Rose says:

    I loved the detail given to the feast..all that care and magic devoured in a second..but then look what sprang out of a moment of would never have happened if we’d not been expelled from that garden!


  7. WabiSabi says:

    I love where the words took you today! Juicy indeed! And thanks for motivating me to leave out the words I don’t really need!


  8. magicalmysticalteacher says:

    What is there about this old, old story that continues to fascinate generations of writers? Maybe it’s the kernel of truth that lies at its heart: We are all curious Eves and unsuspecting Adams, rolled into one. Oh, how complicated we humans are!

    Night Class in German


  9. Misky says:

    Totally excellent take on this week’s words, Elizabeth. Well done!!


  10. Love, love apples…yeah, blood not water….Thank you!Juicy!


  11. Mary says:

    Ha ha, it seems men can never resist temptation offered by a woman!


  12. LOVE! Sultry and surprising, a new twist on a an old tale. I love the way you set the mood for the piece with The Eagles. Great move!


  13. Hahaha … this one has me grinning as well – I could feel the crisp bite and the juices running… Love it! 🙂


  14. Jeep Walters says:

    That’s all we ever need to express ourselves, Elizabeth. Just the words we needed to use. And you did that quite well, I must say. Love the Eagles and that song. Your poems is an extension of that affection! Thanks for sharing it!


  15. Irene says:

    An apple, really, really?


  16. LadyInRead says:

    🙂 really enjoyed the use of the whirlie words here.


  17. Sherry Marr says:

    This is the best rendition of that story I have ever read!


  18. Denise says:

    This made me laugh. It will probably make me laugh every time that I hear that song too!


  19. Pamela says:

    Elizabeth, this is lovely. I rarely use all the words anymore.



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