An Observation

For The Sunday Whirl poetry prompt: Wordle #117

wordle #117


An Observation

Conscious awareness quickly raises high wall
when false note is detected in everyday conversation,
even between best friends.

Questioning conscience might hope it was all a mistake,
some off element in the air perhaps
that prevented clear and proper translation.

Best if addressed immediately lest friendship
sicken and two who were firmly together
go separate ways, both sick at heart,

neither knowing peaceful rest, again.

Elizabeth Crawford  7/13/13

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21 Responses to An Observation

  1. Irene says:

    Hmmm…when friendship goes awry. You put the wordle words to good effect, Elizabeth.


  2. Stan Ski says:

    This is why you have to keep your friends close…


  3. Misky says:

    This rather makes my heart ache from all the lost friends that fallen by the side as we moved around the world. I always say I have a handful of friends that never leave me, no matter where I go. Those are the ones that require constant tending and affection. A beautifully written piece, Elizabeth.


  4. oldegg says:

    When little things trigger a break up there are perhaps deeper issues not yet confronted.


  5. annell4 says:

    hummmm….never to rest….wow!


  6. Mary says:

    Honesty in a friendship is so important. Good to clear things up quickly if there is something one thinks is awry! Hope you are having a pleasant summer, Elizabeth!!


  7. brenda w says:

    This is a strong cautionary piece, Elizabeth. Deception is trickery. We should live true.


  8. Misky says:

    HELP!!! My messages are going into spam, I think!


  9. Nanka says:

    Misunderstandings can happen often even between friends and it does become important to sort it out immediately before it blows out of proportion!! Nice thoughts and great observations!!


  10. Pamela says:

    Love this, Elizabeth. I am a firm believer in communicating to the best of my ability. Good friends are hard to find.



  11. Well said, Elizabeth. Conscious awareness is quick to hear those false notes.


  12. WabiSabi says:

    Good advice! Straightforward is rarely a mistake! wonderful use of the words1 The Gospel According to a Labrador Retriever


  13. This speaks full of truth, Elizabeth. Thank you for this.


  14. Marianne says:

    Words to live by!


  15. Victoria says:

    A very wise observation, Elizabeth.


  16. kaykuala says:

    two who were firmly together
    go separate ways, both sick at heart,

    Both will lose out! This happens all the time! Nicely Eliabeth



  17. Robyn says:

    I like your picture! So sad when this happens since all it would take is a few words to clear the air.


  18. Cathy says:

    So true- however could a false note be the truth and the other person just needs to accept it. Just a thought.


  19. I really like this. A friendship of mine has recently gone awry. I don’t see it mending though. Thanks for visiting.


  20. julespaige says:

    ‘some off element in the air perhaps’

    When we cannot determine what went wrong, we would like to think we can pass blame. And yet in our hearts we know there was a mis-step that has possibly ended the dance.
    I like this piece.
    Thanks for your visit. I hope you are enjoying your summer!


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