Within The Mind

For Musical Notes: Poetry Prompt #7

Within The Mind

mimic fireflies,

darting dance
through darkness,


rhythms in dreams,
roots to remembering.

Elizabeth Crawford  9/20/12

Inspiration:  Fireflies by Owl City


Under African Skies by Paul Simon

About 1sojournal

Loves words and language. Dances on paper to her own inner music. Loves to share and keeps several blogs to facilitate that. They can be found here: https://1sojournal.wordpress.com/ https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/ http://claudetteellinger.wordpress.com/
This entry was posted in Within The Mind and tagged , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

6 Responses to Within The Mind

  1. JulesPaige says:

    All that and more. I enjoy how for me fireflies firmly root the beginning of summer here for me. 🙂

    And for me they always make me think of dancing and movement lit up.



  2. margo roby says:

    I love this, Elizabeth. The alliteration works to both dance where you want it to, and move softly into dreams to root where you need it to. I find that aspect of alliteration fascinating with such polar actions. I feel my self move with the reading of the poem.


    Lol, Margo. I had what I thought was the final draft typed in here last night. But when I went to check it one last time before posting, I began to hear the alliteration and changed it at the last minute. I don’t think poems are ever truly finished, do you?



  3. I thought I had commented here this morning, but must have clicked over and forgotten to click back. I love this Elizabeth – love the idea of images and memories dancing….and being “roots to remembering”.

    Thank you my friend. I wanted to try to grab a bit of each song and combine them. Closed my eyes and saw the fireflies and started thinking about thoughts and ideas that flit through our minds and become the roots of other things. So glad you enjoyed it,



  4. pmwanken says:

    Within my mind I see synapses firing…like fireflies. Gorgeous!

    You nailed it, read my response to Sherry. Thanks Paula for joining in and reading and commenting. I really am having fun with all of this,



  5. PJF Sayers says:

    This is beautiful, Elizabeth. Your use of alliteration is perfect. I keep meaning to do these prompts, but my weeks seem longer and longer, maybe next week.


    Don’t worry about it Pamela, when you can, you will. I’m actually learning from these short pieces. What to leave in versus what can be left out. Sounds a bit like poker doesn’t it? Maybe that’s all poetry is, knowing when to hold or fold them, lol.



  6. ladynimue says:

    interesting take 🙂
    i like your images 🙂

    Thank you LadyN, the music always sets me to dreaming of images.



Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s