Loosely Knit

For The Sunday Whirl: Wordle #71
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Loosely Knit

No real plan, more a recipe
of sorts, lacking a few essential
ingredients. Comparable to fine
pencil tracings on empty paper,
easily erased, readily rewritten.
Like a chain link fence without
a lock at the gate.

The operator rose along with
other shadows at dusk, already
knowing he’d be forgiven
for being late. Night as good
as day when ones business
is unraveling a loosely knit
life.

Elizabeth Crawford 8/26/12

Notes: The words take us to strange places. I’ve been watching past episodes of Criminal Minds. My daughter is convinced that’s where this piece came from, lol.

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19 Responses to Loosely Knit

  1. vivinfrance says:

    Well done, Elizabeth. An atmospheric piece. I wanted to use chain link fence, which leapt out at me from the wordle words, but couldn’t fit it in.

    Lol, Viv. I wanted it because it used up three of the words quickly so made sure to find a way to use it. Atmospheric, hunh? Thanks, I like that,

    Elizabeth

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  2. very atmospheric piece, and yes, it does have a slight criminal feeling to it. Well done. Imagine writing poetry to CSI!

    Thank you Veronica, I occasionally feel that the wordles are criminal. I liked the CSI programs as well but Criminal Minds was always my favorite, loved the quotes at the beginnings and endings of each episode and thought they’d make great prompts for some rather interesting poetry.

    Elizabeth

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  3. He’d be forgiven for being late because the business is falling apart. How sad. Wherever your inspiration came from, this is a really good read Elizabeth.

    Thanks Bren, I like your take on it. I wasn’t sure my daughter wasn’t correct and I’d somehow let a homicidal maniac into my poetry. The wordles sometimes make me feel that way, but then I murder words not people. Creativity is such a useful release, lol,

    Elizabeth

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  4. “The operator rose along with
    other shadows at dusk, already
    knowing heโ€™d be forgiven
    for being late.”

    It struck me with a wow moment bc I only saw rose as a flower until I read your poem, Elizabeth!!

    I agree with, Viv…and Bren, also. ๐Ÿ™‚

    Thanks Hannah, the first part of the poem seemed to come of its own accord, then I had those last three words: operator, rose, and forgiven. I was tempted to put the rose between the operator’s teeth, but settled for letting him rise like all the other shadows at dusk. That gave me a bit of a shiver and I liked it.

    Elizabeth

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  5. brenda w says:

    That last line is perfect. A bit of a surprise, it had me rereading. There’s an element of mystery that I love in this piece. And by the way…..Criminal Minds? I’m addicted to that show. ๐Ÿ˜‰

    So am I Brenda, really like every part of it. Found a cite that would allow me to go back and watch all the episodes I had missed, am so glad that I did. My tv went blotto a few months ago and decided to leave it in favor of regular trips to the library, but missed that program so went in search and found it to my satisfaction. As I mentioned above, I think their quotes would make great prompts for further writing. Glad you like the piece, it came more easily this week for which I am grateful,

    Elizabeth

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  6. Laurie Kolp says:

    Very mysterious, eerie almost. I love it. I’m always amazed at where the words lead me, too.

    http://lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com/2012/08/when-poets-joined-to-play.html

    Laurie, the eerie was somewhat intentional. I get the list on Friday night and write them down in a notebook, working the words around until they work for me. Sleeping with them actually helps. I enjoy a good mystery more than any other. By the time I got to the operator, I liked the idea that he could be the author of the ‘loosely knit life’, or the stalker of it. Ambiguity can be fun, a bit like leaving the gate unlocked,

    Elizabeth

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  7. Marianne says:

    “Unraveling a loosely knit life” is a stunner! Loved this poem!

    Thank you Marianne and it sounds like you all had fun the other night. This community is a wonder and a blessing,

    Elizabeth

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  8. anl4 says:

    Yes, eerie is a good word to describe this one. Well done.

    Thank you my friend, these wordles continue to challenge and that may be the best reason to continue to do them,

    Elizabeth

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  9. Mary says:

    I join those that have appreciated the phrase about a loosely knit life. Enjoyed the whole poem, Elizabeth. Criminal Minds, eh?

    Yes, Criminal Minds. Really like the weekly characters and how they grow over time yet remain very real individuals with flaws and pimples just like the rest of us. Glad you liked the poem, my friend, this one was easier than most,

    Elizabeth

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  10. PJF Sayers says:

    Elizabeth, I can see the parallel to the show. It is mysterious and well-penned. I see you used “operator” quite smoothly. It was one of the words I offered at the event Friday on fb, and couldn’t fit in my piece, lol.

    Pamela

    Oh I know that one, some prompts are simple, even easy, except the ones I wrote myself, lol. I usually try very hard to incorporate all twelve words and there is always one I want to throw out the window. Yes, this week it was operator, lol,

    Elizabeth

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  11. Ditto to all the comments above. Well done. People are going in all different directions with the words this week. What fun!

    We each have particular biases about certain words. That’s why I like the wordles, even though I grouse about them, they force us to step outside of our comfort zone, which means we grow in the experience.

    Elizabeth

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  12. Yes, “unraveling a loosely knit life” is stellar. Great tale you spun here, kiddo.

    Thanks Sherry, I certainly enjoyed the spinning of it, lol,

    Elizabeth

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  13. Kelly says:

    Ooh – this is intriguing and leaves me with lots of questions about that operator. Nice work!

    Glad you have questions, I do as well, lol. Thanks for the visit Kelly,

    Elizabeth

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  14. tmhHoover says:

    I went off into that first stanza. I was seeing a lazy summer day, where the world was slowly unwinding in its own way… a perfect day in my book. Imagine my surprise when I met up with the more dark side of this existence.

    Most things have a dark side and occasionally I do write about them. This one came about in such a way that I wasn’t sure if the operator was the possessor of the loosely knit life, or maybe the aggressor of someone else’s. One of the things I like about poetry, it doesn’t have to answer all the questions. Thanks for stopping by,

    Elizabeth

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  15. seingraham says:

    Oh – I love this Elizabeth – with a very few deft strokes you’ve drawn a very interesting albeit enigmatic character … one I’ll be puzzling over for some time

    http://seingrahamsays.wordpress.com/2012/08/26/shifting-colours/

    Actually, I think I might be doing the same thing, lol,

    Elizabeth

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  16. Willow says:

    This speaks to me in my life with my husband with Alzheimer’ Disease. It seems so right on in describing how life is.

    Your comment was a surprise to me. Went back and reread my own poem and saw where you might be coming from. Bless you for your honesty and thank you for helping me to see something beyond this word puzzle,

    Elizabeth

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  17. Tumblewords says:

    I love your fence! A terrific read…

    Thanks Susan, I like the idea of an open unlocked gate, even in today’s harsh reality.

    Elizabeth

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  18. clawfish says:

    immediate and takes you along i love it

    Thank you Clawfish for the comments and the stroll to your writing space,

    Elizabeth

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  19. Carol Steel says:

    I like the freedom and mystery in the “unraveling a loosely knit life.” Sometimes those loose knits can get into more tangled messes when one is unraveling…mysterious and eerie.

    Thanks much Carol, and the reverse is true as well. Tight knits can be uncomfortable and overly warm to wear. It really is a matter of choice,

    Elizabeth

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