Lesson Learned

November PAD Challenge Day 13: The prompt for today is to write a kind poem http://www.writersdigest.com/editor-blogs/poetic-asides/poetry-prompts/2011-november-pad-chapbook-challenge-day-13

And for The Sunday Whirl: Wordle #30 bees, balance, cleaning, coral, finger, eloquent, motionless, safety, rapidly, point, strength, swivel
http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/

Lesson Learned

With assumed eloquent kindness,
she said nothing about the poem.
Swiveled her chair while pointing
finger out window, where bees
balanced on air, just above delicate
coral-colored blooms.

For a moment, I remained
motionless, then rapidly sought
safety in nearby chair.
Distractedly cleaning glasses,
I prayed for strength not to ask
her opinion, again.

Elizabeth Crawford 11/13/11

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11 Responses to Lesson Learned

  1. What a beautiful telling of a painful experience, Elizabeth. Yikes! I love the bees balancing above the blooms. Such a lovely visual – alongside the pointing finger, turned away from the heartfelt poem. Wow.

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  2. brenda w says:

    This is familiar, Elizabeth, it strikes a chord. I agree with Sherry about the visual. The distraction pulled me away from the dismissal her silence carries. Of course it surfaced again in the second stanza, and oh, how I know that feeling of wanting and fearing response.

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  3. Mary says:

    Gut-level writing, Elizabeth. Many of us probably share similar experiences. Some just don’t see to “get” poetry OR poets. Well wordled.

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  4. Susannah says:

    Oooh you’ve really captured a moment here Elizabeth! And you did it so well.
    I love where the wordle words took you and enjoyed the beautiful image of . . .
    “bees balanced on air”
    The wordle words sent me ‘up in the air’ this week.

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  5. Laurie Kolp says:

    I’m really enjoying your work lately, Elizabeth!

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  6. Elizabeth, this is something all of us can relate to at some point. You have painted the picture vividly with the words.

    Pamela

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  7. Nanka says:

    The sadness balanced with the pleasure of watching “where bees balanced on air”!! Nicely wordled!!

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  8. Your works always please me. You touch the core..

    surface

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  9. Mike Patrick says:

    Wonderful poem. This is not a disaster unless she is a family member. Then, there is no escape.

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  10. Janet says:

    This is great….I love how you leave us wondering:)

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  11. b_y says:

    Ouch!
    What a great economy of scene (and prompts). I like what you did with “cleaning”–it was the hard one for me.

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