About Protective Prisons

 

For We Write Poems prompt: Take It To The Limits (limitations, fences, boundaries)
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About Protective Prisons

Being breathing being on B horizon,
she lives, sees far beyond normal curve
at horizontal lines of existence.

Did not notice how abatis, constructed
in childhood to protect tender places, created
dangerous spaces in yearning to belong.

Slowly learned through participation, fragile
heart can become victim to ramparts raised
as shield from further, future harm.

Now uses arms to curve round, embrace whatever
lives and breathes beside her. Knows that wooden
staves produce sharp slivers thrust toward temporary

flesh, infecting all breath within her.

Elizabeth Crawford  5/4/11

Notes: Am doing some wordplay at my http://1sojournal.wordpress.com/  site. Looking up new words, exploring definitions, then using them in sentences and short verse. The first two stanzas are a direct result of that playing. They seemed to speak to the issue of limits and boundaries. Everyone is welcome to come and play along.

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About 1sojournal

Loves words and language. Dances on paper to her own inner music. Loves to share and keeps several blogs to facilitate that. They can be found here: http://1sojournal.wordpress.com/ https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/ http://claudetteellinger.wordpress.com/
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12 Responses to About Protective Prisons

  1. Tilly Bud says:

    There’s ‘abatis’ again! I’m impressed you managed to use it twice.

    Hi Tilly Bud, didn’t use it twice, those first two stanzas came directly out of the Wordplay exercise. Just copied them to see if they would work. Really glad they did, and thank you for noiticing,

    Elizabeth

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  2. Mary says:

    I love the ending of this poem, Elizabeth. The arms curving around, embracing rather than being held in by barriers of any sort.

    Mary, spent way too many years behind those walls I had erected. They really get in the way of genuine contact and communication. The drive to write certainly punched a lot of holes in them though. Thanks for being here and for being you.

    Elizabeth

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  3. First line took a couple of takes, then I got it, read on and it all worked for me. Notes below confirmed I’d read it the way it was written…

    Stan, I appreciate that. I wondered about using these so unfamiliar words, but this is about reaching beyond limits and couch potato doesn’t work for me anymore. I’m glad of that,

    Elizabeth

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  4. Judy Roney says:

    Interesting reading about boundaries put on for safety become their own prison sometimes.
    Love the end.

    http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/05/demon-birds.html

    Yes Judy, it is amazing some of the things we do to ourselves and then have to work so hard to undo. Thanks for enjoying it,

    Elizabeth

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  5. I so relate to this poem, Elizabeth, having lived behind protective barriers for long years at a stretch, after each devastating pain. Wonderful writing!

    Thanks Sherry, something else we hold in common.

    Elizabeth

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  6. irene says:

    Well it’s true that we live in protective prisons and it’s true that our arms want to reach out and embrace beyond the ramparts. Forward!

    Irene, hopefully it will always be Forward, but I’ve been known to sidestep on occasion. Thanks for the direction,

    Elizabeth

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  7. Very beautiful done….seems to evoke a timeless quality!

    Thank you Annell, timeless or simply universal, familiar to most on some level? Glad you liked it,

    Elizabeth

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  8. pamelasayers says:

    Elizabeth, beautiful, and the added bit slant rhyme, though ever so slight works nicely. I will check out the word play on your other site. You know I am always up for playing with words 🙂

    Pamela

    Hope you do Pamela, the more the merrier. I like using slant and half rhyme, think it helps the flow as well as the sound. Thanks for the beautiful, glad you liked it,

    Elizabeth

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  9. Brenda says:

    Oh word play! How exciting. I love this piece, and will spend some time later checking out your word play site. Fun! Elizabeth, Both here and in the comments you leave on my blog, you always manage to make me feel good inside. Thank you for that.
    ~Brenda

    Hope you know that you do the same for me, Brenda. And will be happy to have you join in the playing. It’s just a bit of a challenge to keep myself, and others, alert and listening,

    Elizabeth

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  10. Mr. Walker says:

    Elizabeth, “abatis” – what a great word, and you’ve explored it well – it has that quality of a living prison, the one we make for ourselves. I can relate. And I like the embrace at the end and the positive infection of breath – literally and figuratively inspiring.

    Richard

    Thank you much Richard. No point in learning new words if I don’t make use of them. Really glad you enjoyed, and I’m still shaking my head about your “Scriptures and Strictures” poem. What a wonderful way to begin my day.

    Elizabeth

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  11. Very evocative and well done!

    Thank you for your very kind words, Madeleine,

    Elizabeth

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  12. Renee says:

    We all take refuge in some form or fashion to protect the parts of ourselves that are vulnerable to the outside world and sometimes hurt ourselves in the process. It is hard to take risks. Very well written.

    I agree Renee, but risks are usually the only way past those ramparts we construct. Thanks for stopping and reading,

    Elizabeth

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